HaiFengCC2022-05-30 05:58:50

尝试写英文诗,请指教。谢谢!

The Meadow

Downy dandelion parachutes
Gliding through the air
As the wind blows

Tiny yet strong seeds
Sprouting up to the ground
As the sun glows

Wild flowers and grasses
Painting an endless meadow
As the stream flows

Snow will fall
Hiding everything beneath
Till the wakening moment
As time knows

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妖妖灵2022-05-30 06:55:32
A very rhymic poem!Very vivid and I can picture it!:)
chuntianle2022-05-30 07:26:43
谢谢分享。点赞。
HaiFengCC2022-05-30 14:35:48
谢谢阅读!总觉得倒数第二句有些不妥,缺失主语。改成如下,如何?希望向各位学习,谢谢!
移花接木2022-05-30 15:25:38
waken是动词原型, 本身就带被动的意思, be不必吧? 这个字的语法可以推敲
HaiFengCC2022-05-30 15:31:20
又做了修改后,才看到您的貼子。谢谢建议,看看这一稿怎么样?见上贴,谢谢!
移花接木2022-05-30 15:38:32
好,有个typo
HaiFengCC2022-05-30 16:42:50
Sharp eyes. 多谢!
梅雨潭2022-05-30 23:05:53
恭喜HaiFeng。首页进来,谢谢网管,The Meadow 推荐成功
梅雨潭2022-05-31 00:08:28
首页是文学城首页的意思:
HaiFengCC2022-05-31 01:17:24
啊,上首页了?第一次写英文诗,旨在学习交流。谢版主推荐,受宠若惊。