kirn2022-10-08 04:21:56

Forget me or not

let go a sobering heart

one pebble from one stone

all I loved I loved alone

 

Forgive me or not

my soul is a still dust

the sun and earth in the same tone

I don't mind being alone

 

 

 

妖妖灵2022-10-08 04:40:46
快手!漂亮!有韵味!小k就是厉害!图片有蝶恋花的味道,是勿忘我花吗?earth前是不是可以把the去掉?
kirn2022-10-08 05:07:13
问的好!不晓得啊,我想两个完全并列,可以强调吗?我去问谁一下。搜勿忘我搜到的,看花瓣也是勿忘我。就瞎玩!
kirn2022-10-08 05:09:23
我抄了爱伦坡一句,要打引号吗?也不知道啊!!
妖妖灵2022-10-08 06:05:12
没那么严格,不过你一说,倒是给我增加了知识:)
jianchi90902022-10-08 16:20:08
我不知道怎么看出来点宗教味道。尘归尘,土归土,万物归一,寂静孤独永恒。
kirn2022-10-08 18:06:12
哈哈谢谢灵灵。我请教过了,还把该句改短了:)
kirn2022-10-08 18:07:12
谢谢jianchi,我是想到了宗教和救赎
忒忒绿2022-10-08 20:53:00
a very good read. forgive?
忒忒绿2022-10-08 20:54:00
很棒的短诗,尤其the first stanza,bravo:)
忒忒绿2022-10-08 21:02:00
禅?
妖妖灵2022-10-08 21:38:06
真好,我也学习啦!
移花接木2022-10-08 22:26:55
小k的alone写得感觉内心强大,我的比较低落
疏影笑寒2022-10-09 17:03:45
Beautiful poem!
盈盈一笑间2022-10-09 19:21:35
上升到信仰和救赎,赞小K
梅雨潭2022-10-09 21:59:56
恭喜小k。首页进来,谢谢网管,[E诗配画]Forget me or not 推荐成功
kirn2022-10-10 00:02:56
谢谢忒绿来读~~
kirn2022-10-10 00:05:09
花帅比较会伤感~~
kirn2022-10-10 00:05:31
谢谢疏影大才女:)
kirn2022-10-10 00:05:48
不敢不敢~~
kirn2022-10-10 00:06:09
谢谢谭主厚爱~~