贾平凸2022-09-15 14:51:16

我们父母那一代人正在老去。

他们留给我们的记忆,也许你我还没有抽出时间来整理。

但,你我有所不知的是,他们的事迹现在是优秀文书题材,换来我们下一代的一封封录取通知。

下面三篇文书是来自2021-22申请年度的优秀文书。

三篇的主题都是自己的爷爷奶奶,作者也都是亚裔 Gen-Z。

读完,你会更喜欢哪一篇呢?等读完各位的留言,我的评论会继续!

 

第一篇:爷爷

Red, orange, purple, gold...I was caught in a riot of shifting colors. I pranced up and down the hill, my palms extended to the moving collage of butterflies that surrounded me. “Would you like to learn how to catch one?” Grandfather asked, holding out a glass jar. “Yes!” I cheered, his huge calloused fingers closing my chubby five-year-old hands around it carefully.

Grandfather put his finger to his lips, and I obliged as I watched him deftly maneuver his net. He caught one marvelous butterfly perched on a flower, and I clutched the open jar in anticipation as he slid the butterfly inside. It quivered and fell to the bottom of the jar, and I gasped. It struggled until its wings, ablaze in a glory of orange and red, quivered to a stop. I watched, wide-eyed, as it stopped moving. “Grandpa! What’s happening?”

My grandfather had always had a collection of butterflies, but that was the first time I saw him catch one. After witnessing the first butterfly die, I begged him to keep them alive; I even secretly let some of them go. Therefore, to compromise, he began carrying a special jar for the days I accompanied him on his outings, a jar to keep the living butterflies. But the creatures we caught always weakened and died after a few days in captivity, no matter how tenderly I fed and cared for them. Grandfather took me aside and explained that the lifespan of an adult butterfly was very short. They were not meant to live forever: their purpose was to flame brilliantly and then fade away. Thus, his art serves as a memory of their beauty, an acknowledgement of nature’s ephemeral splendor.

But nothing could stay the same. I moved to America and as the weekly excursions to the mountainside ended, so did our lessons in nature and science. Although six thousand miles away, I would never forget how my grandpa’s wrinkles creased when he smiled or how he always smelled like mountain flowers.

As I grew older and slowly understood how Grandfather lived his life, I began to follow in his footsteps. He protected nature’s beauty from decay with his art, and in the same way, I tried to protect my relationships, my artwork, and my memories. I surrounded myself with the journals we wrote together, but this time I recorded my own accomplishments, hoping to one day show him what I had done. I recorded everything, from the first time I spent a week away from home to the time I received a gold medal at the top of the podium at the California Tae Kwon Do Competition. I filled my new home in America with the photographs from my childhood and began to create art of my own. Instead of catching butterflies like my grandpa, I began experimenting with butterfly wing art as my way of preserving nature’s beauty. Soon my home in America became a replica of my home in China, filled from wall to wall with pictures and memories.

Nine long years passed before I was reunited with him. The robust man who once chased me up the hillside had developed arthritis, and his thick black hair had turned white. The grandfather I saw now was not the one I knew; we had no hobby and no history in common, and he became another adult, distant and unapproachable. With this, I forgot all about the journals and photos that I had kept and wanted to share with him.

After weeks of avoidance, I gathered my courage and sat with him once again. This time, I carried a large, leather-bound book with me. “Grandfather,” I began, and held out the first of my many journals. These were my early days in America, chronicled through pictures, art, and neatly-printed English. On the last page was a photograph of me and my grandfather, a net in his hand and a jar in mine. As I saw our faces, shining with proud smiles, I began to remember our days on the mountainside, catching butterflies and halting nature’s eventual decay.

My grandfather has weakened over the years, but he is still the wise man who raised me and taught me the value of capturing the beauty of life. Although he has grown old, I have grown up. His legs are weak, but his hands are still as gentle as ever. Therefore, this time, it will be different. This time, I will no longer recollect memories, but create new ones.

ZeroSumGame2022-09-15 14:59:55
你这个软广告比较差,你只说了“一封封录取通知。。。”,都是差州大录取吗?
avw2022-09-15 15:24:50
这类essay是写得很好。不过不太可能加分的。essay不需要写得漂亮。
avw2022-09-15 15:43:56
第二篇写得最好,第三篇不行,而且太长
圆西瓜2022-09-15 15:55:26
飞看一下,记得第一篇进了哈佛啊。其实看范文看再多也白搭。文书的主题
fantasticdream2022-09-15 16:19:29
很多人以为进了名校的essays一定好
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:21:48
仔细看看,这都不是州大的
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:22:26
您说的是麻麻吧
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:22:52
眼光
圆西瓜2022-09-15 16:24:25
嘿嘿。UCB女孩横扫7所旗舰,她的
violinpiano2022-09-15 16:27:44
essay要這麽有用 那早就橫掃了
violinpiano2022-09-15 16:28:21
橫掃藤校了嗎?
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:30:47
对,60%的藤生只拿到一藤
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:32:00
文书不一定让你横扫,但可以提高你横扫的概率
圆西瓜2022-09-15 16:38:51
只申了一所Y :)
ZeroSumGame2022-09-15 16:42:03
你这样软广告,占便宜,没人敢找你,怕被你这么会算计坑了。光明正大的花钱做广告吧
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:44:14
麻烦您把这篇贴出来欣赏下?
圆西瓜2022-09-15 16:48:02
应该不行,我只看过一段。
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:48:05
这话说得有道理
贾平凸2022-09-15 16:50:39
原来是您家私藏啊
fantasticdream2022-09-15 17:08:24
能提高0.1%
bobpainting2022-09-15 17:10:46
是的,需要表现你自己是个什么样的人。不是作文比赛。
bobpainting2022-09-15 17:23:51
看后感觉1和2不错。3一般。
Cambridge6172022-09-15 17:45:21
AO 好像要了解申请人是否适合该校,不是要录取祖父母或者评作文比赛。文章像沙拉酱,录取看里面的菜,然后是混和均匀的味道
品酒2022-09-15 18:30:17
感人
sept.2022-09-15 18:36:57
是出国中介啦:)
avw2022-09-15 18:48:53
不知道,别人的essay怎么会有第三者知道。
朱珠儿2022-09-15 18:59:54
第二篇的theme很好
Cambridge6172022-09-15 19:02:43
我老二自己谢绝给父母看因为我们没有申请过大学,只和康嫂讨论修改定稿,同学朋友之间也没有互相看
zeno2022-09-15 19:29:08
文笔很好
贾平凸2022-09-16 14:50:24
对,stats, ecs 和rec,缺一不可,不过现在这三个都不是稀缺货了,只有essay还是
贾平凸2022-09-16 14:51:14
你这个点提的好!
贾平凸2022-09-16 14:52:55
对,一共只有0.1%的横扫概率。给你从0%提高0.1%,你要不要
贾平凸2022-09-16 14:55:38
这就是娃们在申请上的通病