颤音2022-06-04 00:13:46

Once upon a time


Once upon a time,
I stepped on half a dime.
For the other half, I searched the playground,
but wished for a pound.
I stumbled and so flied the half dime,
in a curve ended in a lily pound.
I heard giggles as resonating as chime,
before I turned my body around.
It is the girl from my neighbor,
in her hands a snow-white lily flower.
She shrouded me with a smell of thyme,
and left on my bruised lips a taste of lime.


© 5 years ago   


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Z - Good fun

4 years ago  

George Hamilton - A

This is a poem just for a poem and well constructed, alive and happy.

5 years ago   

妖妖灵2022-06-04 00:24:16
哈哈,场景很好玩,还巧妙地用了“ in for a penny, in for a pound ”
盈盈一笑间2022-06-04 06:26:01
写得好!读颤音的诗,我会忍不住盯着韵脚看。这首是 aabb,abab的写法?:)
颤音2022-06-04 17:41:52
瞎玩,谢谢
颤音2022-06-04 17:43:23
俺都没刻意,就是一边写,一边默读,怎么顺溜怎么来,觉得14行诗那种还是太rigid
盈盈一笑间2022-06-05 18:08:34
厉害!诗坛有一个常年写14行诗的,可以去探讨一下。。
梅雨潭2022-06-06 01:47:46
恭喜颤音。首页进来,谢谢网管,【少年锦时】 Once upon a time 旧的 挖出来参加活动 推荐成功
颤音2022-06-07 00:57:35
谢谢