颤音2021-07-19 04:11:09

Dust


A stirring of dust
Dancing in the air
Tells me in light we trust
© 8 days ago


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Likes: O Amante, Jenny Middleton, Moss M. Jacques

Jenny Middleton - I like how visual your haiku is XX and there is a lovely sense of positivity about the ending.2 days ago 

 

O Amante - Simple, short and yet it packs so much elegance and details. I could see the dust dancing in the air.

Amazing!

 

beautifulwind2021-07-19 06:02:26
诗人眼里,空气中的微尘就是光的诗,想起花董的“Light”:)
天玉之2021-07-19 17:15:59
前两句挺好的,第三句有点说教的感觉。我读过不少日本的Haiku, 就知道有三句,也不知有什么规矩。我自己写了不少几句短诗,有机会
天山晨2021-07-20 01:52:29
第一次知道有这样一种诗体,好玩!看来